Friday, February 21, 2014

RE: SAMPLE PAPER 3




            I believe that sample paper 3 is best of the three papers. It starts off with a strong hook and ends with a supportive thesis, which keeps you to interested in what the writer is going to say.  This paper has well-developed paragraphs that leads in and leads out when it’s supposed to.  Although, they are well developed they could use a little more juicing! When I say, “juicing” I mean more explanation to the writers points. This paper is written very well and is understandable. The writer needs to fix his citation. Rather than (Alexie ,6) its just (Alexie 6) without a comma. This paper is pretty persuasive as far supporting the writer’s thesis. The writer argues his point of view correctly. The first paragraph after the introduction, could use a lot more evidence. The writer clearly understands how to lead out with explaination. this paper was written very thoroughly but I believe it has a little more work to put in. This person that wrote this has read the book to know it well and explain his thesis throughout the paper, which is great. Their conclusion made you want to read more.

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